Red White and Blue

[SameName]

why was it beautiful, how did it paint such a pic for you, try and give a bit more of yourself in the feedback as to how/why the poem affects you as it does. in general we need a bit more from feedback/mod

Red white and blue the cardinal and the jay,
crows dressed in black are more fitting today.

Under ghost grey she hangs limp at half mast
as two rows of three escort him past.

Breath through the bugle her shoulders fall slack,
those twenty four notes will not bring him back.

Red white and blue is now folded by six
a gift for a loss that nothing can fix.

this poem paints a beautiful picture, very descriptive for the length. but I was a little lost with the "twenty four notes"