03-02-2015, 10:58 AM
The guardian of the winter stood
with frock of frost and grafted wood.
A witches' wand he wields in hand.
The master of his winter land.
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Short, poignant. To be honest, I can't think of much to change other than what Ellajam mentioned. I want to say something to avoid saying winter twice within the same few lines, but I can't honestly think of a replacement word, but if you can, that'd be great I think!
with frock of frost and grafted wood.
A witches' wand he wields in hand.
The master of his winter land.
----
Short, poignant. To be honest, I can't think of much to change other than what Ellajam mentioned. I want to say something to avoid saying winter twice within the same few lines, but I can't honestly think of a replacement word, but if you can, that'd be great I think!