Ardea herodias

[Rogue Yun]

Great Blue (rev2)
In time his patient stalking brings reward
prepared, his neck contorts in reflex mode,
one more primeval contest to behold.

I am not perfect at interpretation, but I get the image of a cat pouncing at a bird. Please forgive me if I am wrong! I consider this poem one of the better ones I've read. Very powerful language that leaves me thinking about the hunt and the hunted. The stanza I have quoted above I consider one of the weaker ones. I feel "reflex mode" just doesn't sound as powerful as the other lines and doesn't do the poem justice, but I will leave a disclaimer saying I don't think I could do this poem justice by critique. Well done! I like this one a lot.

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