02-27-2015, 04:17 AM
There are a number of wonderful images like "sells her wasting body" and "soup kitchens filled with greasy men." As you look at revision, think of the Economy of Words. John Ruskin put it this way, "Say all you have to say in the fewest possible words, or your reader will be sure to skip them; and in the plainest possible words or he will certainly misunderstand them." If you've ever seen this six word story by Hemingway, you can pack a great deal in a small package. “For sale: baby shoes, never worn.” I look forward to seeing your revision.