Before it gets any worse

[rayheinrich]

Extreme/severe words (adjectives, adverbs and all the rest) should be used
with restraint. A single cry of "WOLF!!" will bring the villagers; any more
than that and they will ignore you and use their time to write poetry.

rayheinrich, I am unsure of what your feedback means

Exaggeration. There are just too many strong
words/expressions in the poem. Not only do they lessen
the impact of what you are trying to express, they
are the root of many clichés.

See the words with the ">" before them. It's not that all of them should be
taken out or toned down, but you really need to change 70-80% of them.

Tears >cascade down my face as you >collect your >win.
Your >prize today is my >dignity which has come >unbound.
and I can no longer >fight for what could have been.
Your lyrics continue to >tear and >pound,
becoming such an >unbearable sound.
The >weight on my left hand proves I agreed to this >curse.
I cover my ears to stop the >pain as my >prayers give sound.
Please love me >less, before it gets any >worse!