02-23-2015, 07:02 AM
(02-22-2015, 03:43 PM)Brownlie Wrote: I liked the okra bit, but I would prefer more of a "show not tell" aesthetic.Thanks for your input. I struggle with just that issue. I need to learn to shut my mouth and let my words do the talking. I have attempted to take what you said to heart and have posted an update to the original. Thanks again.
(02-23-2015, 03:12 AM)poe_enthusiast Wrote: I thought this was very interesting. I think that there is room for more imagery in order to paint a brighter picture. I also think there are a few abstractions in the poem that need to be explained such as the ignorance and truth.Thanks for your comments. Let me know if the edited version provides more imagery. The "ignorance and truth" line refers to some of the reasons that individuals were institutionalized. Abortion, desertion, emancipation, marriage, masturbation, and typhoid fever were all considered as causes of psychosis. Indigent individuals were more likely to be institutionalized for these than the more affluent. For that reason ignorance played a role in some incarcerations while in others, the individuals were actually suffering from some type of mental illness. I edited that line out anyway. Again, thanks for commenting, I truly appreciate your opinion.