02-22-2015, 08:12 AM
on reading i have to agree with tecktak. the many clichés weaken any chance of it being a good poem. search out the common phrases and discard them for something with substance and originality. use as was suggested metaphor or/and simile. we all know what depression is. make your view of it a unique one.
notice i said view and not speech. how do you see it? i am a broken eggshell. i am bereft of flesh, i am a lost sock....be adventurous. as long as you ground the poem there are few limits as to what you can say.
notice i said view and not speech. how do you see it? i am a broken eggshell. i am bereft of flesh, i am a lost sock....be adventurous. as long as you ground the poem there are few limits as to what you can say.