The Other Side

[leftovernachos]

I vibe well with the Dante's Inferno subject matter, but as others have said, the rhyming feels forced, and without rhythm. I'd say debonair would be wrong here unless you wrote "THOUGH I have lived a life of debonair"... The word "for" in this instance kind of translates to "because". Maybe if you skipped the rhyming and focused on your message the poem might have more weight to it? I really dig the idea of having a nonchalant attitude towards eternal suffering in light of having made your own decisions, though.

This path eclipsed from light and life I find

Relates to pages once viewed under a bind

My only option to dive into darkness

To be judged by those who think of me less

The choices of past life were none but mine

So brand me a tragedy and bury divine

March me to my endless despair

For I have lived a life of a debonair

This is me realizing what Dante wrote about in the Inferno turns out to exist. To be on a path that goes dark and the only way to go is the darkness where the demons of hell judge based on sins committed. The result being to suffer for eternity, but without regret due to living a life carved by me.