02-20-2015, 03:28 AM
Hi
I know this is a non critique thread, but felt that perhaps i could just mention that I could not make any sense out of this one at all - Sorry.
This is my reading:
Four black foals - yep got it solid image
that are braying ...okay so they are donkey foals...no wait they are now bleating like sheep...(which are they)
anyway, these lambs or donkeys can see a witch with broken hands (which is why they are making the noise) - odd, but okay I suppose.
The donk-ambs then fall and somehow become knotted threads and they fall around holes that are bleeding on The / A devil's feet.
This could well be really clever and I am being slow, or it could be jibberish.
Sorry about these comments - normally i try to find something possitive to say but this one defeated me.
Having said the above, keep writing and posting - this is the best place i know to improve - and these comments are made by someone who has written more than her fair share of poems that were rubbish .
I know this is a non critique thread, but felt that perhaps i could just mention that I could not make any sense out of this one at all - Sorry.
This is my reading:
Four black foals - yep got it solid image
that are braying ...okay so they are donkey foals...no wait they are now bleating like sheep...(which are they)
anyway, these lambs or donkeys can see a witch with broken hands (which is why they are making the noise) - odd, but okay I suppose.
The donk-ambs then fall and somehow become knotted threads and they fall around holes that are bleeding on The / A devil's feet.
This could well be really clever and I am being slow, or it could be jibberish.
Sorry about these comments - normally i try to find something possitive to say but this one defeated me.
Having said the above, keep writing and posting - this is the best place i know to improve - and these comments are made by someone who has written more than her fair share of poems that were rubbish .