Ardea herodias

[Deadrise]

Hello Ellajam,

Thank you for the feedback, and for your time.

Hi, deadrise, inTO is problematic, I go INto the the house. This is exactly the kind of error I make all the time, it is so easy to hear it as correct, but if you isolate the word it is poetic wishful thinking, something I indulge in myself way too often. I'm a beginner at this but I think I'm correct in this case.

You are correct indeed. I caught that error yesterday while working with the piece (my heart sank for a moment) In have not been able to come up with a correction as of yet. On the bright side it still flows well enough for now when read aloud.

Oh, and I'd prefer the title Blue Heron or something else, I don't mind googling at all but I don't know what you gain by making the title a different language than the poem.

I am thinking Great Blue may be an improvement.

Take care,
John