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02-19-2015, 01:55 PM
Hi - thanks for the read and comments. I didn't want to have a whole heap of gerunds, so 'take' it is. They gather, they take, they vanish. All the same tense. 'Those' is a sound rhyme with 'showed' and the flow is a lot better with it in there. I'll think about 'showed' though.
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