Poor Johnny Goodman

[tectak]

Any similarities to persons alive...er...or reported dead but not...are coincidental?
The piece doe not benefit from making the couplets in to four lines XAXA instead of AA. Punctuation would be much more certain if the longer lines (ropes)were used. As it is it is more guillotine than gallows.
Capitalising of every line is for pseudo-poetic birds. It makes the piece less certain in intent and destroys confidence in ability...as this is in Mild, 'nuff said.
Best,
tectak

I'm not sure what you mean about the couplets XAXA instead of AA.  Are you suggesting I change the entire structure of the poem?  Or just split up each section into two segments instead of four?

I put in punctuation that I hope clears up how I think it should sound.  Also I changed the capitalization, per request.

Thanks,

-BW

As per:
Poor Johnny Goodman, sitting in his apple tree, A
waiting for the sun to set, soon, on his misery A
Poor Johnny Goodman, looking at the sky, B
hoping for the twilit hours to quickly pass him by. B
etc.

So yes and no.
Best,
tectak