02-09-2015, 04:34 AM
Hello everyone! I really appreciate all the feedback I've gotten so far (and the kind welcome).
@ellajam
For some odd reason I've grown accustomed to capitalizing the first word on each line. I'm not sure there's a stylistic explanation as to why I tend to do this but I just do. However, I will take your advice and fix the whole capitalization thing.
@Grace
Interesting parallel you made, I'll give it a read. It's oddly exciting that you pick up on the stream of consciousness feel of it, though despite it being therapeutic to write I still would appreciate any criticism you have. I find it very sweet that you feel rather inclined to protect the poem but really, you have the thumbs up to say whatever you'd like.
@Brownlie
For the sake of both knowledge and curiosity, why would you avoid "lusty townsman sins"?
@71degrees
Thank you for the encouragement and positive remarks! I'm a very big fan of alliteration and I often find myself utilizing it subconsciously. I will edit the poem out and sort the capitalization issue. I will be posting more as I grow accustomed to sharing my poetry publically, as this the first time I've officially done so.
@ellajam
For some odd reason I've grown accustomed to capitalizing the first word on each line. I'm not sure there's a stylistic explanation as to why I tend to do this but I just do. However, I will take your advice and fix the whole capitalization thing.
@Grace
Interesting parallel you made, I'll give it a read. It's oddly exciting that you pick up on the stream of consciousness feel of it, though despite it being therapeutic to write I still would appreciate any criticism you have. I find it very sweet that you feel rather inclined to protect the poem but really, you have the thumbs up to say whatever you'd like.
@Brownlie
For the sake of both knowledge and curiosity, why would you avoid "lusty townsman sins"?
@71degrees
Thank you for the encouragement and positive remarks! I'm a very big fan of alliteration and I often find myself utilizing it subconsciously. I will edit the poem out and sort the capitalization issue. I will be posting more as I grow accustomed to sharing my poetry publically, as this the first time I've officially done so.