02-06-2015, 12:05 AM
(02-06-2015, 12:01 AM)ChristopherSea Wrote: I like it, but I am thinking that there may be a better word then 'solid'. Especially, as it is in the refrain. I suppose it's the double modification of a noun (ledge) thing that kind of makes it feel like a filler. If we do use two adjectives, they need to be highly significant. Solid implies security, stability, etc. However, is their a better word? Of course, I don't have one! Maybe this is not a problem for you. See what you think./ChrisThanks, Chris, I'll certainly think on it and see if I can come up with something. It's true, what would granite be if not solid. Thanks for pointing out the flaw.
atop a slab of granite ledge. might work, just as bad? Now I'm not so sure I like atop.
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