Villanelle 1st try -Edit

Villanelle 1st try -Edit

just mercedes
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02-05-2015, 11:13 AM

For a first this is epic! You've captured the mood of a villanelle, which is moody. Smile

) The only line that stands out for me is "Blues on vinyl's all I play" - slightly wrong meter.

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RE: Villanelle 1st try - by just mercedes - 02-05-2015, 11:13 AM

RE: Villanelle 1st try - by milo - 02-05-2015, 11:37 AM

RE: Villanelle 1st try -Edit - by just mercedes - 02-07-2015, 08:46 AM

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