02-04-2015, 04:22 AM
(02-04-2015, 03:27 AM)bena Wrote: Hmm. Yes, this is definitely prose, not sure how poetic it is though. You have flowery language, but that doesn't make it poetic. It seems to me to be more of philosophical prose than poetic. It is interesting in the thoughts presented, but it does seem very much to be a soup of Nietzsche, Plato, and Hegel vomited onto a page. I'm not sure how qualified I am to give you much input into improvement. Sorry.Thank you so much for your response. I had a good laugh on that soup description haha, but I understand from it how this piece may be lacking a bit in direction. But I also find it essential to have a natural flow of thoughts, and a lot of the times they interweave quite sporadically. I guess it takes practice and more attention to balance in the editing process.
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