Oleander Spoon (some swearing)

[ChristopherSea]

Rustymetal, I enjoyed reading your story, it had a tongue-in-cheek style and flow for me.
The slant rhymes work to my satisfaction, but you have many punctuation errors to correct (almost in every line).
The only way to suggest possibilities is by doing close to a complete rewrite. I will PM you with a version if you like.
You have a lot of inverted language as well, e.g., 'A plan for him, she had in store.'
Additionally, this is an incomplete sentence:

'A cake made early that morning,
enhanced by the seed of the bloom.'

Maybe this would work:

'A cake made early that morning,
was enhanced by seeds of the bloom.'

However, something like 'tainted' may be more accurate than 'enhanced.'

This particular stanza is a bit awkward and needs alternate punctuation and wording:

“You are right” the woman uttered
“Finish eating and then make your way
but the girl is at her Grandmothers,
this evening, with her, I’ll convey”.

Welcome to the site and good luck with your next edit. Let me know if you want
my punctuation corrections. /Chris