01-29-2015, 09:17 AM
(01-29-2015, 07:29 AM)Wjames Wrote: After a few beers, the game, and a couple laughs at the bar,Good choice of title. There's a peaceful, light atmosphere to the poem. Snow muffles sound . In that peace, "warmed by the thoughtless sweat of war". Excellent last line. I liked the tumble of clear images that told the story.
the boys and I like to head down to the pond for some midnight shinny.
Beneath a black sky and some old flood lights,
we fight over rubber with wooden sticks in falling snow,
warmed by the thoughtless sweat of war.


