01-28-2015, 04:18 PM
I quite liked this poem. I am a new writer so I don't have a lot of knowledge on what poems are supposed to be. I took the poem to be about being caught in a flooded creek and being swept powerlessly into a drain. I have been in a drain and I have seen pics of lava tubes so I can see why you might choose that image especially coming from the perspective of being inside the drain rather than looking down into it. I found it to be a bit confusing in places "Unconscious but I aver that I could see myself."???? and the middle verse. I clicked on because of the title but I think the bath was surely finished at the end (just like the unfortunate victim). I like to see unusual subjects though.