01-25-2015, 04:13 PM
Paul,
I'm sure it does need editing as when I was posting it, even having gone over it quite a view times before, I found around ten more errors. However I have to disagree with developing it further, it was simply a little throw-off humor/satire (although without any subtly). It's fun to write but it has little substance and requires virtually no talent or skill, plus I hate writing dialogue. However I appreciate your comments, although I would contend that this is less a poem and more prose, even if I did truncate the lines like poetry. It's why I posted it in missile-anus.
Thanks again,
dale
I'm sure it does need editing as when I was posting it, even having gone over it quite a view times before, I found around ten more errors. However I have to disagree with developing it further, it was simply a little throw-off humor/satire (although without any subtly). It's fun to write but it has little substance and requires virtually no talent or skill, plus I hate writing dialogue. However I appreciate your comments, although I would contend that this is less a poem and more prose, even if I did truncate the lines like poetry. It's why I posted it in missile-anus.
Thanks again,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.