January Floods

[Magpie]

Hi, I'm also struggling with this a little bit, although it is interesting. It would be easier to read more fluently with more punctuation, mostly full stops. 


January Floods

It's not a
crash
a plunge    -I wonder if these two lines are necessary
a tumble -  or if they are adding anything extra
Rather a dull
thud
- then the slow,
seeping
Explosion of a violet -When I first saw violet here I started to think about crocuses that
invasion                      appear in late January, is this the flood perhaps? However I'm now
                                wondering if it's a possible typo 'violent'
an army of strain       - also is this gap between lines intentional, I know that the editor sometimes puts
in the squalor of the sighs     gaps in for some reason.

I wish I could offer more but at the moment that's all I have. But full stops to define each sentence better would make it read more fluently.


Mark