"P.D.Q." a poem

[Brownlie]

P.D.Q.

What do you do
If the trouble arises from a choice
One has already sealed
And mailed off long ago,
Like parcels to world’s end?  -- The syntax seems a little off here.

A driver sees an alley,
Travels down it,
And soon finds it too narrow.
The price for going forward is bodywork.
If ego and a wallet were on similar scales
He might live with gnarly scratches,
Or toss his cash to craftsmen. -- Do you mean the mechanic?

His ears adjust to shrieks of metal,

The scarring, as well as the scarred. -- I feel like more clear and straightforward details concerning the narrative events here would be helpful. It seems like someone drove into an alley and scratched up their (or someone else's) car.  
Our bulk ruins the brickwork
Of boundaries enshrining us on either side.
Backing out never occurs to a lead foot.
We park ourselves therein, surrender
To destination’s ego, having begged,
Borrowed, and stolen to get here.

Bad things do transpire when terrible people -- For whatever my opinion is worth, I wouldn't use "do" to pad or "fill-in" the meter.


Aren’t smart enough to run.
What’s so wrong with the direction
Of his origin?
Who did he disappoint last year?
These freedoms we named choice
Are seedlings grown into folly's foliage -- Not sure I like personifications of adjectives too much. Though, perhaps you could argue for them. Also, I'm not sure you would want to add much explanation like this, especially if you want the center of your piece to be an extended metaphor.
Marking the way to one point in terminus.

To lower the eyes bows the head.

He shakes his hands off of the 10, and the 2. --- Now, it seems to me that 10 and 2 fits quite nicely into meter. "He shakes his hands off 10 and 2" In fact, I rather like the tick and tack sound of 10 and 2.
He holds his palms together as in the desperation
Of single-minded closing.
He knows that the reopening of either,
Or both,
Won’t change the past obstructing him.
Only the thumps of his heart run now.

I left some comments, perhaps they will be helpful. Good luck with it.