01-20-2015, 04:29 AM
Sounds like Diogenes telling Alexander to get out of his sun...
There is a juxtaposition between Freud and insanity that is ongoing
with numerous references to classical forms of beauty, dead pseudoscience [and living ones].
My critique is that this would be awfully hard to recite aloud.
That is a stylistic preference showing, nothing more.
'To deduce the accurate proportions of their courtesan,
they collected skulls
that would not lie
in mountains on a battlefield.'
That a Jungian could take a skull and say "This was a Valkyrie"
- could this overrule the cruel death of a Florence Nightingale?
There's a whole lot of symbolism here. It could use some traction in everyday life. Not that I'm saying to explain yourself in your own poem, lol. ON THE WHOLE this was a rather fascinating read. It will need a lot of re-reading, but look at what you've already inspired this reader to think about ;-)
There is a juxtaposition between Freud and insanity that is ongoing
with numerous references to classical forms of beauty, dead pseudoscience [and living ones].
My critique is that this would be awfully hard to recite aloud.
That is a stylistic preference showing, nothing more.
'To deduce the accurate proportions of their courtesan,
they collected skulls
that would not lie
in mountains on a battlefield.'
That a Jungian could take a skull and say "This was a Valkyrie"
- could this overrule the cruel death of a Florence Nightingale?
There's a whole lot of symbolism here. It could use some traction in everyday life. Not that I'm saying to explain yourself in your own poem, lol. ON THE WHOLE this was a rather fascinating read. It will need a lot of re-reading, but look at what you've already inspired this reader to think about ;-)