01-14-2015, 05:33 AM
Hi. I like the description of earth in the three lines beginning "I can see the eroded Earth". I think these lines work well. :-)
I'm totally confused throughout the poem about who is speaking. I don't know who the 'you' is referring to in the second line, and still a bit flummoxed at the last line. A bit more clarity on this would help, I think.
I'm totally confused throughout the poem about who is speaking. I don't know who the 'you' is referring to in the second line, and still a bit flummoxed at the last line. A bit more clarity on this would help, I think.