Wild Life

[71degrees]

Late
last night
a woman
was heard
screaming
at the thin
moon.

In
an alley
behind
a distant house,
a chained
dog strained
to join
her.

I like this kind of poem. It's both a snapshot of a moment in time and a reaction to it. That said, I agree with the first critique that the structure is a little too self-conscious. It's trying too hard to be fancy poetry. Two simple, straightforward lines would be more effective.

Totally agree. Thanks.

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Late
last night
a woman
was heard
screaming
at the thin
moon.light

In
an alley
behind
a distant house,
a chained
dog strained
to join
her.

See bolded.. not much of a poem here. Not much of a crit either but that is all I got.

Thanks. As you might expect…not much of a response here, either