A Young Romantic Hits the High Notes

[tectak]

A Young Romantic Hits the High Notes

 
I stand on the edge of a cliché,
holding another as it aches with dismay,
and so I go anon and moan, Period. Great opener... and moan. Anagrammatical "anon mad". My mind works like that
it matters not that I groan,
or after all I have invested, I am alone! Capital It...protest all you like  but the "or" should go
Please, leave me, have no care, Interesting comma after please. Cannot decide if meaning chages without it. Your call
but my I ask, did you do something to your hair? may
If I had such beautiful hair as you possess,
I think I would not now be so depressed,
though I guess you know as once you were my friend, Maybe simplify these few lines by word swap. Syntactical inexactitude. Nothing serious but out of character methinks
and even though you hate me now, your presence would help me mend.
Yet, I know by dent of my sins I deserve no compassion, dint.
oh for the time, when I was young and dashing.  To me, cries out for "Oh, for the time when I was young and in fashion"

[b]Hi dale,
Sometimes you write to please...but sometimes to appease. This is a half-way house. I take what I connect with from it...yet it stays the same...like a singularity. This must be veracity  verse excusing itself for farting by blaming someone else...in that sense, well done. It could have been anybody...though I have it on good authority that Leanne never farts.
Best,
tectak
 
 
–Erthona
 
 
©2015

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