01-07-2015, 02:38 AM
Ellamybella,
Anon: I meant it in the archaic way, or as Robin Williams once used it, "I shall go and touch myself anon."
Actually it is a young person speaking. The last line is an example of an obviously forced, not to mention terrible rhyme. To make the rhyme work "dashing" would have to be said like "compassion," so it would be rendered as "dashen'," which I think you must agree is pretty bad.
Good effort on your part, the meter is almost too good, except for L8, perfect meter flaw
Valentine's day? Not quite. It is however only three months until a poem a day in April. Are you ready milo?
xoxoxoxo
Dale
Anon: I meant it in the archaic way, or as Robin Williams once used it, "I shall go and touch myself anon."
Actually it is a young person speaking. The last line is an example of an obviously forced, not to mention terrible rhyme. To make the rhyme work "dashing" would have to be said like "compassion," so it would be rendered as "dashen'," which I think you must agree is pretty bad.
Good effort on your part, the meter is almost too good, except for L8, perfect meter flaw
Valentine's day? Not quite. It is however only three months until a poem a day in April. Are you ready milo?
xoxoxoxo
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.