01-04-2015, 03:38 AM
(01-04-2015, 03:04 AM)ushaikh17 Wrote: Very deep and profound. The moral/lesson conveyed is overt, and you did a great job overall portraying the primary regret of most individuals. However, if I would suggest one thing, it would be to make heavier use of figurative language. Other than that, it was fantastic!Hi, welcome to the site. Please try to be more specific in your critique, make a real effort to help the poster improve his poem. How and where could he add "heavier use of figurative language"? Which lines might be edited? Which did you find profound?
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