True Blondes and the Surface of Mars

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True Blondes and the Surface of Mars
 
She asked me if I wanted to come up
and see her pictures from the Mars rover. Apostrophes are bug(gers)[/ b]
Of course I said.[b] For clarity you NEED to indicate narrative. You might get away with a laconic "Of course, I said" but for me it is:
"Of course", I said.
She showed me a picture that she said
was a coffin for a “grey” and behind Consider a semicolon after "grey"; drop the "and". This line and the next are linked phrases. Comma after "it". Don't like "it" but the semicolon is a solid link back.
it construction of an ancient civilization.
Then on to other even more unlikely things. Again, not strictly a sentence. "Then on to.." begs who?
Picture after picture, after picture,
she impressed upon me her case.Slight lack of something in this line. Wotsit called?...Ah yes..meaning.

At the end of the presentation
she asked me what I thought.
I told her I thought she had acute pareidolia.
This somehow led to sex.
“Oh well,” I thought
while eating at the “Y”,
“she was a true blonde!”   Was? How hungry were you?

[b] Nice one, dale. Pareidolia is a new one to me. I have stored it.
Best,
Tom
 
 
–Erthona
 
 
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