Vow of Silence;

[ellajam]

I really like your poem, I understand the meaning and love the style in which you write.  It sounds as though it comes from the heart.  I am no critic but I like the way words play in my mind, the way they stirred empathy and understanding in me.

I really enjoy how the change of the time of day guides the mood through the poem. The transition from dawn to dusk parallels the mood of the narrator.

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Thanks and welcome to the site, I'm sure you'll get the knack of it.
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