True Blondes and the Surface of Mars

[Brownlie]

True Blondes and the Surface of Mars
 
She asked me if I wanted to come up
and see her pictures from the Mars rover.
Of course I said.
She showed me a picture that she said
was a coffin for a “grey” and behind -- I would put a comma before and
it construction of an ancient civilization. -- I would put was or something before construction (that is how I pronounce it at least).
Then on to other even more unlikely things.
Picture after picture, after picture, -- You could find a way to use a line break between the two after pictures.
she impressed upon me her case. -- To me, the syntax sounds inverted here.  It seems more natural to me to say, "she impressed her case upon me."


At the end of the presentation
she asked me what I thought.
I told her I thought she had acute pareidolia. -- Now this line I like quite a bit. That is a great word. However, you wouldn't need to use I thought twice.
This somehow led to sex.
“Oh well,” I thought -- You might be able to get away with italics instead of quoting in some instances.
while eating at the “Y”,
“she was a true blonde!”  
 
 
–Erthona
 
 
©2014

For some reason I get the feeling we might not be talking about a she. I may be inferring too much, but the "Y" and the reference to "mars" makes me think that we're dealing with a queen of the desert or something. Either way, pareidolia is a good word for any poetic arsenal.