12-30-2014, 07:21 AM
(12-30-2014, 07:11 AM)just mercedes Wrote: I like your whimsical poem - apart from the last line, which doesn't satisfy me, somehow.yah, i agree. i want something there and i think it is saying /what/ i want but the /how/ is dreadfully pedestrian. Thanks for reading and commenting.
(12-30-2014, 07:16 AM)rayheinrich Wrote:I hadn't really thought of that. nice.
most wonderful title - can visualize the film noir poster from here
(12-30-2014, 07:11 AM)just mercedes Wrote: I like your whimsical poem - apart from the last line, which doesn't satisfy me, somehow.changed it. still not great but better, I think.