On Leaving
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(12-29-2014, 06:14 PM)just mercedes Wrote:  
(12-29-2014, 01:33 PM)71degrees Wrote:  We leave one step at a time:
from the table after eating, a failing job, something about 'from' bothers me
certain beliefs, the broken heart of a home 'broken heart' feels a bit tired

the in-and-out of our breath,
one hand against cold glass I like this image

from the black rocks near Calumet,
green frothy water breaking I like the contrast with the glass
over them, and that Sunday afternoon
when the sky seemed to pull apart
like the innards of a cotton pillow

when we pretend is this in the past too?
life is easier than it really is
I felt the end sort of tailed off - I'd like to see some return to the title. Thanks for posting.
Interesting your comment about "…from" / I only added that before posting based on another's observation. Thanks for all the comments. Appreciate your interest.
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Messages In This Thread
On Leaving - by 71degrees - 12-29-2014, 01:33 PM
RE: On Leaving - by just mercedes - 12-29-2014, 06:14 PM
RE: On Leaving - by 71degrees - 12-30-2014, 12:19 AM
RE: On Leaving - by QDeathstar - 12-30-2014, 01:30 AM
RE: On Leaving - by 71degrees - 12-30-2014, 03:05 AM
RE: On Leaving - by Wjames - 01-02-2015, 03:30 PM
RE: On Leaving - by 71degrees - 01-03-2015, 01:39 AM
RE: On Leaving - by ellajam - 01-02-2015, 09:39 PM



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