a young girl, limping edit #1

[QDeathstar]

You said "All the men in the hole glared at her." but I didn't write "glare" - that's something you've supplied. I'm sorry you're uncomfortable with the idea that your body is activated by unconscious patterns. You wouldn't be human if it wasn't, though.
So it's the content of the poem, not the form of it, that bothers you?

explain the significant difference between gazes locked and glaring. I am not uncomfortable. I don't know if it is the content or the form.
if you mean that all men are predators, then it's the content
if you don't mean that, then it's the form.
it's up to you.