12-21-2014, 02:26 PM
I may be dense but how does one get "in a plateau". If you were meaning a psychological plateau wouldn't it be plateaued? Or possibly a plateau, but I see way one can be "in" a plateau. When meaning it as a point in progress that has stopped, it is usually said as I've plateaued, or "I'm plateauing," or maybe I've reached a plateau. Sorry I just don't get it. maybe you can explain? Also the rest of the line, while it sounds slick, for me anyway, it carries little meaning.
"A voice
searches for a tragicomic monologue
in a plateau of mimetic psychodrama."
with simpler words.
searches for a tragicomic monologue in a state of no growth (of) imitating intense emotional roles.
sorry I just don't get the point being made.
I have to agree with Jack on the "All-Things" deal, at least on the point of it being confusing. It reminds me of the All-spark from transformers. Even though it wouldn't be quite so fancy, wouldn't "everything" work just as well. "All-Things just makes me feel like I'm in a fantasy novel, but that's purely personal.
"the texture of mute struggles" This does not bring any kind of image to me. The words sound neat, but it translates zero meaning to me. I know what all the word mean, but when put together in this way, they seem meaningless. I keep having to back up to find a point of entry for this to make sense.
"The white howl of a small town I have no idea what the "White Howl" is, as it is so ambiguous it could be fifty different things.
is heard until it is felt, Maybe I could read this as though it is a wind, or such a strong sound that it actually impacts you, OK so now it has been felt, but now we backtrack.
until it is the texture of mute struggles, Texture has many definitions and there is little around it to help one choose the correct one, so I'll just choose "essence", "mute" here looks like it would mean unvoiced, So, "until it is the essence of unvoiced struggles"
until it is a disposition nearing diagnosis."
what these lines seem to say is that the White Howl, whatever that is is felt until it becomes the texture of mute struggles and also becomes the disposition nearing diagnosis. And that is it for the White Howl, what ever it was as it does not seem connected to the "The Printing Press of All-Things", but then that's a different story. As this is mild critique I'll stop there, and I probably should have stopped before I started for all the good I've done.
Dale
"A voice
searches for a tragicomic monologue
in a plateau of mimetic psychodrama."
with simpler words.
searches for a tragicomic monologue in a state of no growth (of) imitating intense emotional roles.
sorry I just don't get the point being made.
I have to agree with Jack on the "All-Things" deal, at least on the point of it being confusing. It reminds me of the All-spark from transformers. Even though it wouldn't be quite so fancy, wouldn't "everything" work just as well. "All-Things just makes me feel like I'm in a fantasy novel, but that's purely personal.
"the texture of mute struggles" This does not bring any kind of image to me. The words sound neat, but it translates zero meaning to me. I know what all the word mean, but when put together in this way, they seem meaningless. I keep having to back up to find a point of entry for this to make sense.
"The white howl of a small town I have no idea what the "White Howl" is, as it is so ambiguous it could be fifty different things.
is heard until it is felt, Maybe I could read this as though it is a wind, or such a strong sound that it actually impacts you, OK so now it has been felt, but now we backtrack.
until it is the texture of mute struggles, Texture has many definitions and there is little around it to help one choose the correct one, so I'll just choose "essence", "mute" here looks like it would mean unvoiced, So, "until it is the essence of unvoiced struggles"
until it is a disposition nearing diagnosis."
what these lines seem to say is that the White Howl, whatever that is is felt until it becomes the texture of mute struggles and also becomes the disposition nearing diagnosis. And that is it for the White Howl, what ever it was as it does not seem connected to the "The Printing Press of All-Things", but then that's a different story. As this is mild critique I'll stop there, and I probably should have stopped before I started for all the good I've done.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.