The Other Side

[tectak]

This path eclipsed from light and life I find The lack of punctuation throughout the poem is making it a little hard to understand. Otherwise, this line is fine.

Relates to pages once viewed under a bind What relates to pages...?

My only option to dive into darkness See lack of comma is really making hard to see what is being said. One more thing, the rhyming feels bit forced.

To be judged by those who think of me less

The choices of past life were none but mine Wouldn't it be better 'The choices of past life were 'of' none, but mine"?

So brand me a tragedy and bury divine (nice line)

March me to my endless despair

For I have lived a life of a debonair

This is me realizing what Dante wrote about in the Inferno turns out to exist. To be on a path that goes dark and the only way to go is the darkness where the demons of hell judge based on sins committed. The result being to suffer for eternity, but without regret due to living a life carved by me.

I like your poem. The message is presented in a nice and clear way. The lack of comma is making it hard to understand it for me.

This is not worthy of consideration as critique...indeed, it is utterly contradictory to the point of deliberate cynicism. If you are trying to make a point you have only succeeded in showing yourself up. One must question whether you have taken the time to read the poem. Try harder, this will not do. Please READ the site rules and guidelines.
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