12-12-2014, 06:28 PM
bgre9184,
You do not need to explain yourself to me, but since you have. I am quite familiar with Dante's Inferno, and that people one would not expect can end up there. These are primarily the people who do nice things to be seen, and to receive adulation for such things. This fake holiness will definitely get you sent to the Inferno. Certainly "dilettante" would apply, which is why I mentioned it. However the word you used, "debonair" has no negative connotations at all and there is no reason being that way, polite, and socially considerate, would get anyone thrown in the Inferno. You might as well say that such and such man was condemned to the Inferno because he would surreptitiously donate money to the Salvation Army. Since you brought it up, grammar is not something that is separate from the poem. Before you post it, it should be in the best grammatical shape you can get it in. To do otherwise is a disregard for ones own work, and a statement that says you do not think poetry is a serious endeavor. Plus it is just flat out rude to present a piece for critique that you could have gotten in better shape, but instead decided to let someone else do the work. Remember, grammar is an integral part of writing, and writing is how one creates a poem, so grammar is an integral part of poetry.
To say,
"I have (haven't) done anything grammar wise to it ao far since i just wanted some critique on the actual poem."
Is equivalent to saying, I haven't yet gotten things spelled correctly, cause I "just wanted some critique on the actual poem."
dale
You do not need to explain yourself to me, but since you have. I am quite familiar with Dante's Inferno, and that people one would not expect can end up there. These are primarily the people who do nice things to be seen, and to receive adulation for such things. This fake holiness will definitely get you sent to the Inferno. Certainly "dilettante" would apply, which is why I mentioned it. However the word you used, "debonair" has no negative connotations at all and there is no reason being that way, polite, and socially considerate, would get anyone thrown in the Inferno. You might as well say that such and such man was condemned to the Inferno because he would surreptitiously donate money to the Salvation Army. Since you brought it up, grammar is not something that is separate from the poem. Before you post it, it should be in the best grammatical shape you can get it in. To do otherwise is a disregard for ones own work, and a statement that says you do not think poetry is a serious endeavor. Plus it is just flat out rude to present a piece for critique that you could have gotten in better shape, but instead decided to let someone else do the work. Remember, grammar is an integral part of writing, and writing is how one creates a poem, so grammar is an integral part of poetry.
To say,
"I have (haven't) done anything grammar wise to it ao far since i just wanted some critique on the actual poem."
Is equivalent to saying, I haven't yet gotten things spelled correctly, cause I "just wanted some critique on the actual poem."
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.