12-08-2014, 01:14 AM
(12-07-2014, 08:32 AM)Erthona Wrote: how she responded? "she might be remembering"?
what's the rationale behind all the semicolons? It seems sentences would do just as well, with less confusion.
"when he asked her how lucky he was to have her share his bed" It says "he asked her" but this is not a question.
How does the narrator know these things, is this to imply he is also the man? If so, why be so obtuse about it?
I must assume that "Andrew Square Metro" is some kind of bus station, unless it has some more non-obvious meaning, then it should probably be footnoted. It leads one to suspect that it plays a larger role than simply a place as it is in the title.
"her" response is not to a question, and seems generally a non sequitur.
I'm sure there may be something symbolic under this layer of malaise, but it bypasses me.
dale
Erthona: I agree w/"how" rather than "what"…thank you for this. Nothing symbolic going on here. You're trying too hard to be impressed. Haven't you ever seen anyone you've never met and had a running conversation w/that person, imagining who they are, where they've been, what they've talked about? The narrator would know everything about them. He "could" be the man, but in this case, he isn't. The man is the man.
I do appreciate your assumptions, I do, but again, let the poem come to you for what it is, not for what you want it to be.