12-07-2014, 03:00 PM
(03-21-2014, 04:31 AM)Ryan_w_r Wrote: A beautiful fallacy woven together with silken strings of white,Do not misunderstand; I appreciate anyone who writes. However, this really comes across as pretentious, and the last two lines are a little overdramatic especially. I feel like the message in this writing is largely reactionary instead of substantive. But I'm just an internet stranger.
Neatly laid across your heart, and stitched on tight
A lovely little falsity, better yet, a lovely little fable...
Preying on the minds of the young, the weak, the ready willing and able.
a travesty believed to be a gift from his benevolent grace,
A chemical imbalance, an imperfection, a deceitful disgrace.
Do not be fooled by this malevolent waste,
Free yourself of these lies tight embrace.
This lie is a virus passed amongst society much like H.I.V.
Only the virus that I speak of is spelled L. O. V. E.
No meter, dramatic, bad end rhymes... I know, I know..