Andrew Square

[Eluoh]

I see a young woman
in the glass reflection
of the Andrew Square Metro; (Going to point out now that the semicolons are being used without need, especially when some of the sentences can end as sentences, and there isn't much relation to the next sentence you want to tie them to.)
her face is the sexual face
I’ve always desired; (It has a boldness to it, and I like that.)
her hands hold rosary beads
like soft blue bird eggs; (These last two lines are great.)
she might be remembering
what she responded ("what" isn't working for me here.  Try "how she responded"?)
last evening when he asked her
how lucky he was
to have her share his bed; ("share" is weak.  "in" would even be stronger, and so would other word choices like "occupy" etc.  This sentence can end, and the semicolon is not needed.)
she told him according to mother, (Adding "that" between "him" and "according" creates a better flow between the words.  It's hard to tell when commas are needed in a lot of cases, and personally speaking, a comma is not needed here.  The line is just fine to transition into the next without punctuation, otherwise the comma gives an awkward pause.)
angels are always watching
but sometimes it doesn’t hurt
to pray anyway.  (I like this closer.  I had a problem with it at first, but after re-reading it a few times, and fully trying to grasp everything, it has become favorable.)

The major thing that got in my way was the awkward punctuation.  Aside from that I really liked this piece.