12-07-2014, 08:32 AM
how she responded? "she might be remembering"?
what's the rationale behind all the semicolons? It seems sentences would do just as well, with less confusion.
"when he asked her how lucky he was to have her share his bed" It says "he asked her" but this is not a question.
How does the narrator know these things, is this to imply he is also the man? If so, why be so obtuse about it?
I must assume that "Andrew Square Metro" is some kind of bus station, unless it has some more non-obvious meaning, then it should probably be footnoted. It leads one to suspect that it plays a larger role than simply a place as it is in the title.
"her" response is not to a question, and seems generally a non sequitur.
I'm sure there may be something symbolic under this layer of malaise, but it bypasses me.
dale
what's the rationale behind all the semicolons? It seems sentences would do just as well, with less confusion.
"when he asked her how lucky he was to have her share his bed" It says "he asked her" but this is not a question.
How does the narrator know these things, is this to imply he is also the man? If so, why be so obtuse about it?
I must assume that "Andrew Square Metro" is some kind of bus station, unless it has some more non-obvious meaning, then it should probably be footnoted. It leads one to suspect that it plays a larger role than simply a place as it is in the title.
"her" response is not to a question, and seems generally a non sequitur.
I'm sure there may be something symbolic under this layer of malaise, but it bypasses me.
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.