It may be raining, but we don't have to go outside

[QDeathstar]

Please keep in mind I am using this as a spoken word piece, but it may also appear as a paper copy.
--first critique-able draft.
It may be raining, but we don’t have to go outside
Let me be the remedy for the season,
it may be raining, but we don't have to go outside.
Take the flow and slow dance in our arms,
and just take a bath in it.
You can be the scented candle,
we can be the flame. did you intend there to be one individual(you) and then the "we" as a separate group? Or do you mean we and in "you" and me? It sounds a bit strange since I'm not sure who we is...
Don't worry about the rain, we don’t have to go outside.
We can bundle up, and sing our song.
We can dance forever, the night is long
and we can pretend it’s a saturday, because there's nothing I’d rather do
than spend the day with you. this is very generic and part of literally every boy band song in the early 2000s
You're more than work, and more than play, this sounds like an insult
so lets relax and take a day.
I’ll bring you chocolate, we melt worries away. I'll and wee I find confusing again
Everything is so expensive, we don’t have to go outside.
Make our walls bloom with colors,
make our colors vibrant, the repetitiveness of colors is ineffective
vibrant like our romance,as is the romance and vibrant, it doesn't seem to serve a purpose or develop meaning, in context of the rest of the poem
romance like a supernova.
Lets let the rain start a beat.
Heat it up, pick a cup, lets erupt.
I want to hear you singsong all day,
we can pingpong back and forth,
you’re my rebirth.
So sing us a song, take my hand...dance along;
angels are our spot light.
Let this day be long.
We don’t have to go outside.