Meddle
#11
The poem did not strike out at me at all. It's a nice sentiment but I thought it was - to be frank - quite boring. Try spice it up a bit, throw in a reference to the sense of smell or something. [In my own opinion I'd ditch the skipped lines too]
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Meddle - by Mark D. Windmill - 11-28-2014, 05:01 AM
RE: Meddle - by shemthepenman - 11-28-2014, 05:33 AM
RE: Meddle - by Mark D. Windmill - 11-28-2014, 06:00 AM
RE: Meddle - by shemthepenman - 11-28-2014, 06:59 AM
RE: Meddle - by Erthona - 12-01-2014, 07:53 AM
RE: Meddle - by Mark D. Windmill - 12-01-2014, 08:19 AM
RE: Meddle - by Erthona - 12-01-2014, 12:58 PM
RE: Meddle - by Mark D. Windmill - 12-01-2014, 01:38 PM
RE: Meddle - by billy - 12-01-2014, 10:46 PM
RE: Meddle - by ExpressionofZero - 12-04-2014, 10:09 PM



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