The Next One

[billy]

i would have probably would said "it's way to long fr short form"

it reads more as prose for me, it's not a bad read but like true said, there's little ambiguity to make the return or to allow them to see it on more than one level. i wasn't expecting the hood. the poem has two possibilities; either your paying a ransom or it's a trap, i see her as a right bastard and it's a trap.

TE,

I agree, it has little of poetry in it. More a short narrative than a poem. I thought about putting it in short form, but I knew someone would say it's not short enough. That's not usually the problem. Oh well, it is unreasonable to expect consistency in an inconsistent world.  
I actually thought about you when I was writing this, as it seemed more your style than mine, but I don't argue with them, I just catch them as they come out of the shoot. I started to add more, but then I thought, what would TE do? and decided against it!  
The last four lines are in present tense.
I figured the blood spurting from his headless body was texture enough

Thanks for your comments, as always, appreciated.


Dale