Empty Cave (Revision 3)
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Hi Mercedes,

Thanks for the read and comments. I could see possibly cutting the "the" before cold and the one before pictures without losing much. I will consider that on the next revision. And yes, I was thinking of the same horse. Despite the epistemological idea of knowing, I worried that the last line might be a bit too pat or possibly trite. I'll consider the cut you mention.

Thanks again,

Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
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Empty Cave (Revision 3) - by Todd - 11-26-2014, 10:04 AM
RE: Empty Cave (Latest Revision) - by Brownlie - 11-26-2014, 05:33 PM
RE: Empty Cave (Latest Revision) - by bena - 11-27-2014, 04:41 AM
RE: Empty Cave (Latest Revision) - by just mercedes - 12-01-2014, 10:04 AM
RE: Empty Cave (Latest Revision) - by Todd - 12-01-2014, 11:30 AM
RE: Empty Cave (Latest Revision) - by Todd - 12-01-2014, 11:23 AM
RE: Empty Cave (Latest Revision) - by Todd - 12-01-2014, 11:24 AM



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