12-01-2014, 11:30 AM
Hi Mercedes,
Thanks for the read and comments. I could see possibly cutting the "the" before cold and the one before pictures without losing much. I will consider that on the next revision. And yes, I was thinking of the same horse. Despite the epistemological idea of knowing, I worried that the last line might be a bit too pat or possibly trite. I'll consider the cut you mention.
Thanks again,
Todd
Thanks for the read and comments. I could see possibly cutting the "the" before cold and the one before pictures without losing much. I will consider that on the next revision. And yes, I was thinking of the same horse. Despite the epistemological idea of knowing, I worried that the last line might be a bit too pat or possibly trite. I'll consider the cut you mention.
Thanks again,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
