Fingernails

[Keith]

I'm really liking the ideas that you've got in here Keith. 

The fine detail of 'dermatitis hands' and the double meaning of 'connecting' in S1 are a good start for the setup of the whole story ahead. 
Stanza3 is an excellent idea and I really like it, but it does seem somewhat out of place with the rest of the poem in its style. It is almost a short poem in itself and those first 3 lines in it are excellent.
I was also a bit confused with "He burned his brightest into mirrored chrome", and because of the final stanza I thought it may be a drug reference, perhaps mirrors in nightclubs, mirrors with lines of coke???
The last stanza is a fine ending with some good images, I particularly like the line "but the morning paper always unfolded with a coffee and a shave" which tells so much more.

Thanks for the read,

Mark

Thank you Mark, I agree about S3 but I wasn't sure what to do with it, maybe it will end up a poem on its own, good call. The Mirrors as you say in clubs, drugs and its a mod thing were they put loads of rear view mirrors on their scooters, are all relevant but it was his reflection and what he saw being real and true and not the lie he had been living that made him burn his brightest. Thanks again Keith