11-28-2014, 10:54 PM
Short, succinct - I admire that.
The first line would be better as "Reading by candlelight" to me - I immediately put the location as outside because of the "firelight" word. Candles are hardly ever burned outside. You could even use "flashlight" I suppose.. Also I wonder if the word "outside" could be used only once. Because it is so short it needs the variety IMHO.
But great imagery here by few words - did I mention I admire that?
Paul
The first line would be better as "Reading by candlelight" to me - I immediately put the location as outside because of the "firelight" word. Candles are hardly ever burned outside. You could even use "flashlight" I suppose.. Also I wonder if the word "outside" could be used only once. Because it is so short it needs the variety IMHO.
But great imagery here by few words - did I mention I admire that?
Paul