Meddle

[shemthepenman]

hello
do i smell a pink floyd reference?
anyhow, why the capital letters? it seems fashionable now days.
I think 'where we start/ or WHERE we end' is better.
I appreciate the gaps between lines, representing ripples etc. and it is effective.
the actual poem is a bit limp. It feels like it's all trough and no crest, if you see what I mean. more empty space than something you can get your teeth in.
regardless, thanks for sharing.

A floyd reference indeed. My poems are mostly empty space, then again , it what it is meant to point at....not an entertainment for the mind but rather a dwelling that isn't meant to be something that the mind can grasp. I am not a very good writer, poems are just a pointer to a meditative state for me. Thanks a lot for your time mate ...your my first review on this site Smile
p.s. Is this site british , are most people here british?

I am british. But, the wonderful members of this site are from all over the place. As long as you keep a sense of humour and don't take anything to heart, you'll be fine.
also, fuck, I didn't realise I gave you your first critique, I would have expanded. The Pink Floyd thing blindsided me, and I had to listen to that album again

ps. maybe think about giving an explicit nod to Pink Floyd in the title or footnote.