11-26-2014, 03:20 PM
From someone who still has not yet posted his first poem, I want to say great job.
I liked the blanket of shame and smile/frown twist, and how this lead up to having a voice/choice. It reminds me of that feeling of giving in and agreeing on what everyone else says and not having courage to speak the truth. I am not religious in the sense employed here so I disagree that it was god who gave this character hope! (If that was the intention). Funny thing is the poem I wrote is a little bit similar to this, with a spiritual twist, just not in the same way.
Good stuff looks like you worked hard on it, and I only hope when I post mine it will have the success this one does.
I liked the blanket of shame and smile/frown twist, and how this lead up to having a voice/choice. It reminds me of that feeling of giving in and agreeing on what everyone else says and not having courage to speak the truth. I am not religious in the sense employed here so I disagree that it was god who gave this character hope! (If that was the intention). Funny thing is the poem I wrote is a little bit similar to this, with a spiritual twist, just not in the same way.
Good stuff looks like you worked hard on it, and I only hope when I post mine it will have the success this one does.