The Stutterer (Mwaba Don)

[billy]

a big plus for effort and trying to use the simile as an image, a suggestion would be to to make both parts better related. look out for excess with small words

Obstacle crop up forces emotion this line lets the whole poem down, (if the first word should be obstacles?)
slow down, like a motorist spots
potholes and cautiously adjusts,
in conditions of social discomfort. personally i think you need to make the opening more coherent, i think it's trying to hard to be a poem. the simile could work but doesn't. [like a cautious motorist
adjusts for potholes] that said it's doesn't connect well enough to the action of stuttering

Silent pauses occur involuntarily, [involuntary pauses] is all that's really needed. the simily is again being forced by the reader to fit the opening statement
like compressing and loosening
a gas hose concurrently,
sounds are annoyingly prolonged. no need for [are]

But with dynamic desire to orate,
as though realizing a positive idea
trickling memories of mumbling flow,
dialog goes on remorseful  hold.

A part of a stutterers nature,
as if ones forced on a life path
that coaches in a torturous way
the harmony of body and discourse.